Saturday, December 12, 2009

Shelter Streaming Sur Megavideo Here Is A Small Story I Wrote, It Is Short And I Want To Know What You Think.?

Here is a small story i wrote, it is short and i want to know what you think.? - shelter streaming sur megavideo

Horse for the dry forests of the Black Hills on a noble assembly is an eternal experience. A red-brown mare constantly pushing through the bushes. The pine needles, pine cones, maple autumn shades sports, waste and dry grass, the dirt road. Walking Horse mounting rhythmic mix gently with the cool breeze flowing through the trees. Birdsong hurry here and there in the sky for sunflower seeds. Blue skies, heavy rain gradually darker as they come into view. A mixture of conifers with large maple form a security barrier. Squirrels jump from tree to tree, gathering food for the winter before. The heady scent of the juice is mixed with rotten wood, fresh manure, and the promise of rain. The thick aroma in the air, it lifts SAP includes everything it touches. The heady scent of the juice is mixed with rotten wood, fresh manure, and the promise of rain. The silence is as enjoyable as a good book can not quit. Gradually, the air is denser than the cloud ready to start their strawberriesthe. The sun shall hide his face like dark clouds over the sky. A flow of fresh air through the branches of surrounding trees. A light rain falls, the son of the dense mass of clouds looming above. The birds dart to take the nest and squirrels coverage refuge in the trunks of maple trees. The rain falls hard and fast. The slide drops on the bare skin of the pilot, creating a truly refreshing feeling. The patter of rain echo from the trees. The dry forest, drink the last drop of heaven, and offered more in demand. Gradually, the rain stopped falling and the clouds moved away, and reveals once again the bright sunshine.

7 comments:

jane said...

It was very good. I enjoyed it very much. If this is just the beginning of a story? Next please ... I want to read the rest of his expressions very well. Keep up the good work !!!!!!

mlist32 said...

The image is rich and full, but not connected to your character. When I read, I "know" and understand the elements of human history. What did he feel when he walked through the woods ... Mood change over time? I was waiting for someone? Did he escape a painful memory. Add the human factor and are more committed to me, but a wonderful description and I could feel that I ... I have not quite! Thank you for sharing your story!

t.i.m said...

I thought it was really nice and sent my imagination is in full swing, as I imagine all this, he seemed so quiet in this busy time. good for you, keep it up

Katrine Nyce said...

This is more like prose. I agree that this is not a glance.it story.more like a stage, a stage promises something, what BIG.is rain?
Coz I really thought it was rain. Rain forest.because have felt ourselves to this crucial question. determine the image of the forest of touch, smell, temperature, was sounds.i there and saw that to describe you. I had the feeling that something dark hovers under.
The expectation of a prudent event.you me excited and then I had expected, but very disappointed. It's like I waited so long and suddenly I realize that not wait.it worth talking about the anti-climactic.so what about rain? How does the rainfall rider, the horse, wood? It was a kind of cleaning? the promise of a sunny day, or rainbow, perhaps?
I guess that's what I'm looking, so you just need a little more.
keep it up ...

Frajola said...

Certainly exceeded with descriptions of nature! It's almost a whole chapter about it! You start cutting a little bit, because something is in the process, but never happened! It's annoying, but still a good start! Adelante! And I intend to write!

Conway said...

Started the journey of a thousand words at this moment, he stopped to look and think I'm alone again, naturally.

[blahh] ™ said...

What else? was not even tell a story.
to write just a piece waaaaaayy with many adjectives.
I hope this is just the beginning.

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